 Brochure from one of Berlin's Most Famous Hotels
Before:
"..our completely equipped Business Centre,
our elegant salons, an imposing ballroom and, of course, our immaculate
standards of service will ensure the success of your private or business
function."
Analysis
A good translation, but needs stylising.
- 'completely' is an adverb which goes
with 'finished'.
- 'imposing' sounds negative.
- 'standards of service' is too wordy.
After:
"..our fully equipped Business Centre,
elegant salons, grand ballroom, and immaculate service, will undoubtedly
ensure the success of your private or business function."
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